Chao may anh chi,
Em hien dang hoc o community college, em moi bat dau hoc mua Winter, cho nen em van la newbie. Em ko co kinh nghiem ve viec vie essay cho admission hay scholarship ji ca. Nhung hien truong em co scholarship program, cho nen em cung bon chen tham gia de co kinh nghiem cho writing cung nhu tham vong duoc mot cai scholarship nho nho nao do...Mac du em biet kha nang cua minh van con rat kem!
Em xin post essay cua minh len, mong su giup do cua cac anh/chi!
Essay cua truong phai viet dua tren 4 prompts, bai viet ko gioi han so tu, mien sao fit duoc vao 2 trang words la ok. Voi lai em di cai workshop danh rieng cho scholarship esay tips cua truong, thi specialist co de cap la cang detail cang tot! Em ko co kinh nghiem lam, cho nen em viet mot ban draft theo nhugn ji em hieu la minh nen viet. Xin may anh chi cu thang tay criticize, em rat mong duoc hoc hoi! Mot lan nua cam on may anh chi rat nhieu (em cu noi long vong mai..hic, sorry!)
4 Prompts :
A summary of your life experiences and/or hardships (i.e. applicable personal attributes, family, work, extracurricular activities on and/or off campus, volunteer work, etc.) that have impacted your path to higher education.
A description of how you developed an interest in your major field of study.
A discussion of your educational and career aspirations as well as your ability to complete and achieve these goals.
A discussion of how your educational experience will be affected if selected to receive a scholarship from the Mt. SAC Scholarship Program.
Va day la ban draft cua em:
It was just another late night looking for scholarship, as I murmured the quote “Many of life's failures are men who did not realize how close they were to success when they gave up”, my mind was also reminding me about the obstacles that I have been through and one more hard day like this cannot keep me from successful. Since I was a little kid, instead of going to pre K like other kids, I followed my Mom from house to house. While she was doing her works as a nanny and a housemaid, I captured her images with a pencil on the scrap papers which my mom collected for me from a house cleaning job. Sometimes I wandered from a street side walk to a flea market, watching people’s gestures, conversations, arguments somehow those actions were very interesting to me. One day, I passed by a place call “The Young Artist Club”, through the glass window I saw children at my age were painting with colors. I told Mom that I wanted to join that club and gave her every penny which I saved from my little allowances. A few days later she handed me a water color set and a couple brushes. She didn’t say much, but the tears from her eyes, I understood. I began to paint the image of people and every day life’s event with colors. I showed my paintings to my mom and school teacher, they suggested that I should participate in the “District Art Contest”. They got to be joking. Me! To compete with thousand young artists whose had been trained by the best teacher their family can afford? Anyway, I presented my ark works with no hope to win anything. At least I had a chance to view other people’s paintings
. To my surprised, I was awarded a second prizes in "District Art Contest”, and a third place in “Pink Lotus”. I was so graceful and happy because I know that moment opened a new chapter of my life. The reward gave me a chance to join the “Young Artist club”. During the time at "Young Artist Club", I had a great support from the mentors. Through them, I invented my own style by using geometric shapes and overlap elements to achieve my vision. I weaved layers, colors, shapes, textures and my soul into my paintings strongly as a mark of my personal statement. Oil was my favorite medium.
I thought I would be an artist when I growth up; however, plan never went well according to my plan. By the age of 13, my dad's business was at the edge of bankruptcy because he put his trust on wrong the wrong people. As the result, instead of going to extra classes after school like others, I had to help my dad typing the paperwork, going to construction site to check up equipments. I thought I would hate it, but surprisingly,. Looking at the working class people working hard all day like my parents with enthusiasm and great responsibility to create a safety home for people admired me. Spending most of my time after school at the construction and witnessed the project was done by the sweat of worker's brow, the happiness of the family when moving in their new house; indeed I could image this new house will be a foundation for a family to growth. Besides that, talking to the craftsmen or my dad to know how the materials works, what step need to be done first and all the little tricks to make the house more perfect inspired me to follow my dad's path. It was a pleasure for me to encounter the hardship because in which I found the deep respect for the art of joining human's imagination and their skills. I was impressed by the knowledge of how things were build and the art of putting human's vision into concrete. However, I had not found my passion until one day I started to sketch buildings as I wandered around the construction site, and I found the charm of architecture that allows me to convey my artistic ability and my interest in buildings. Through out the hardship, I gained my appreciation for middle class working people and their human skills which succeed the challenge of developing the whole out of innumerable details, out of various functions and materials. So I was curious about the concepts of other countries, how is the different of their expectation for beauty in architect? And if that is a case, how they apply the human skills differently in building? Therefore, I decided ta study abroad.
I was not born in a wealthy family’ however, I believe everyone have their chance, if they are willing to work hard for their goals. At sixteen, I bike-walked five miles every weekdays to work as a baby sitter and while babysitting I do my home works or continue painting. On the weekend, I sometimes volunteered at local orphan house to teach handicap children how to paint. I did not have an opportunity going to English class. Day by day, I read grammar book and started trying to read English fiction, that my mom borrowed from her boss to improve my English. I have strong accent and struggling with writing, but I proudly cross over the language barrier line by practicing. I saved every penny from the sale of my paintings and works for my future education. Now I am at Mt SAC as I wished, and I will take this opportunity as a jump-start for my future education. My ambition is attending in an impact program to pursue my bachelor in Architect. Moreover, I want to double my major in Civil Engineering, and pursue an master degree in architect at California Polytechnic States University. To be a good architect or civil engineer, I understand I need the deeper knowledge, and Cal poly, which has a great program where I can develop my intellectual thinking, problem solving and enhance mathematics, design and physics skills. But John Berger says the work of architecture as a focal point from different angles simultaneously: historically, aesthetically, functionally, personally and passionately. And in order to approach that stage, where I can find myself as a architect and engineer who can invent a masterpiece which is remarkable in its functional rhythm, I will have to learn more and that is the reason for me to master my knowledge in the master program at California Polytechnic States University. More important, that is an academic where I can be surrounded with fellows who have same interest and passion like mine. In my developing country, people need desperately for a safety transportation and living environment. My aspiration is to be able to work and create a better working condition for the middle class. Indeed, I dream to create a net-working between construction and architect companies, so that the cost of building a home for people who needed is not so expensive. Besides that, the net-working can create more jobs and benefits for middle class working people. Moreover, I want to expand the network around the world so that developing countries can be exposed with new technology and developed countries can transfer the new technology to others. I believe human has an equal right to live in a safety environment.
My educational experience will be affected effectively if I am awarded a Scholarship from the Mt. Sac Scholarship Program because it is a great honor for me. It is not only a financial support, but more important, it is a prove for myself, for my family that even though I am not yet a outlier, but with my desire, ambition and enthusiasm, which are my only strengths; I still can seize the opportunity, working hard and being successful. As a part of the culture and how I was raised, underestimate myself is a normal sensation of human being; as a result, I have been struggling with peers. Indeed, the thought of studying abroad was a object of ridicule for my cousins. It always seems as if I never worked hard enough; indeed, my low self-esteem has been eating me up because if I am a good student, I would had a scholarship and my parents won’t have to work fourteen hours a day and still stress out about my tuition fee. For me, this scholarship is a chance to prove to my parents that I have been working hard to achieve my dream. And it will be relief for them knowing that I am on the path to success. This scholarship will be a motivation for me to work harder and being more consistent with my dream, which is achieving my architectural and civil engineering degree, then someday I will be able to apply my artwork style into building architecture and showing to the world that "I was here" through my architectural masterpiece.